Last week I was editing The Blue Blazes, back from the Metal Men of the Cranky Cyborg, and in this WIP (work-in-progress) I found the following, erm, puzzling sentence:
“He sat on the toilet, dwarfing.”
The scene takes place in a bathroom, yes.
But I have no idea what this sentence means.
It certainly… conjures some fascinating images. (And leads to the new Tolkien-esque euphemism for pooping: “BRB, I’m going to go throw some dwarves into Moria.”)
The editor was wise enough to place a very lengthy note next to this sentence, which if I recall correctly went on and on and looked something like this:
Seems to sum it up.
Every once in a while we find a sentence in our WIPs that make no goddamn sense at all.
So, that’s the question.
What curiously broken sentences have you found inside your work?