Last week’s challenge: “The Secret Door.”
I love a good opening line.
You lead with a great first line in a story, man, that’s just hooks you right away, doesn’t it? It’s like a key to a door. Opens up the world and your interest in it lickety-split.
So, that’s what I want from you.
I want you to write one opening line.
And then I’ll pick three.
And if those three people are in the United States, I’ll send them a copy of my book, The Blue Blazes, when it comes out. If you’re in the UK or anywhere else across the big wide world, you may have to settle for a digital copy, but I’ll make sure to get you one just the same.
Now, some rules:
A line means one sentence, not two, not three.
You get one entry, not two, not three.
Put your entry in the comments below.
I’ll pick three of my favorites by the close of Thursday the 11th (11:59PM) and then the following challenge next Friday will be for you folks to pick one of the three opening lines and write a story based on it. Which means you also might want to take a gander at these suggestions:
Shorter is better than longer.
Try too to keep in mind that you’re writing an opening line for other stories; the trick is to write something engaging while still writing a line that could apply to a great many styles and genres of story. Something that appeals and hooks in this case not just readers but other writers, too.
You’re writing lines for potential, is my point.
That’s how I’ll pick my favorites. Based on their potential to make interesting stories.
So! You’ve got a little less than one week.
One opening line. Let’s see what you’ve got.
jaceyhollis says:
Washing blood and entrails out of my hair wasn’t what I had in mind for a Friday night.
April 6, 2013 — 4:12 AM
rccross says:
The gun stared at her with the promise of the inevitable void.
April 6, 2013 — 4:58 AM
Robert Forrester says:
The rain had washed away the blood, but not the memories.
April 6, 2013 — 7:18 AM
jessie says:
I swear that this thing is not powered by electricity, but by a process of Satan’s ass crack spawned cosmic osmosis that sucks rainbows from the sky and the happiness from frolicking Unicorns and puppies.
April 6, 2013 — 7:48 AM
Casz Brewster says:
I hear the drums of battle.
April 6, 2013 — 7:59 AM
churnagec says:
For those of you still left, welcome to the fuckin’ funhouse!
April 6, 2013 — 8:09 AM
Sebastian Peters (@SebThePeters) says:
Liking it!
April 7, 2013 — 6:32 AM
Icarus Mortis says:
Sense might be anything but common, but I never thought it would be me; not until I heard that ‘click’.
April 6, 2013 — 8:18 AM
kjolly19 says:
“Time to get some skin in the game kid,” he said as he placed the gun in my hand.
April 6, 2013 — 8:36 AM
Robert Mitchell says:
When Cicero said, ‘You may trust him in the dark’ he wasn’t talking about me — not then, and certainly not now.
April 6, 2013 — 8:50 AM
LaMishia Allen says:
I tried to stay hidden, away from everyone and everything: I tried not to let the darkness leak out but they just wouldn’t leave me alone.
April 6, 2013 — 8:51 AM
RavenBlackburn says:
Uh, I like this one!
April 6, 2013 — 7:23 PM
The cook with liquor lady says:
Inspecting her blood splattered hands still shaking from adrenaline, she marveled at just how easy it was to kill the man.
April 6, 2013 — 9:06 AM
octavalittera says:
She looked up and cursed the blue of the sky.
April 6, 2013 — 9:12 AM
Sofia says:
You are fired.
April 6, 2013 — 9:30 AM
johnpatrickmcp says:
It was a cold rainy April morning in Detroit and in the middle of the field the corpse was screaming.
April 6, 2013 — 10:58 AM
Delia says:
I was supposed to be off the grid.
April 6, 2013 — 11:47 AM
Anthony Idalarola says:
I was a rookie reconnoitering his first crime scene and it had been raining hard all afternoon.
April 6, 2013 — 11:56 AM
cajetane says:
I chose my new name carefully – it meant nothing, and no one.
April 6, 2013 — 12:09 PM
Stephen G Zoldi says:
I picked the wallet up; the money inside was blood-spattered.
April 6, 2013 — 12:36 PM
spyrous says:
i wish i could have given this a try but i discovered this site just two hours ago!!!!
April 6, 2013 — 1:02 PM
NDC says:
Sex is all it’s cracked up to be.
April 6, 2013 — 1:39 PM
spyrous says:
It won’t matter now, but i came up with an idea for an opening line: Where I come from people say that life is an open door, but if thats true what is imortality?
April 6, 2013 — 2:03 PM
Becca says:
The only thing I can remember is the sound.
April 6, 2013 — 2:30 PM
TWilcox says:
With steady hands, he said, “Open wide, and remember to keep your tongue out of the way or it will bite you.”
April 6, 2013 — 2:35 PM
EK Johnson says:
People die all the time, but you never really believe it’ll happen to you, especially after it all ready has.
April 6, 2013 — 2:56 PM
Tam says:
Somewhere, a penny drops.
April 6, 2013 — 3:10 PM
RavenBlackburn says:
„Now that is what I call a high quality steak knife“, she said, smiling as she cut though muscle and bone of her third victim this week, looking into his panicked eyes.
April 6, 2013 — 3:13 PM
Kate McCausland says:
Spitting a broken tooth into my hand was not on my list of things to do today.
April 6, 2013 — 3:42 PM
Mr Urban Spaceman says:
This is not an opening line. Chuck, dude, I do not envy you having to wade your way through the 265 comments (thus far). Sorry to add to the problem. I will drink a whisky in sympathy (it’s a blended malt scotch, I hope you karmically receive the smoky flavours)
April 6, 2013 — 4:08 PM
Jacob Cornell says:
“This is what dying is like kid, and you better get used to it.”
April 6, 2013 — 4:38 PM
linderan says:
I hastily jerked a spear out of a dead man in tattered, bloody business attire before hurrying into The Elevator with the other, panting survivors.
April 6, 2013 — 4:55 PM
E. Michael Chase says:
Special message direct from the Chosen One™: “Fuck Destiny, fuck it right in the ear.”
April 6, 2013 — 5:26 PM
KL Swiss says:
He awoke and groaned, at the pain in his head and out of dismay upon realising the map was gone.
April 6, 2013 — 5:33 PM
Michael Trimmer says:
He wished the Colonial bastard had been a better shot.
April 6, 2013 — 6:08 PM
Howie says:
This, thought Ryan Curley as the young woman in the Quality Control Booth splayed trembling thighs and loosed another pathetic whimper of pleasure, is not what I went to college for.
April 6, 2013 — 6:38 PM
Adam C. says:
The coffin ascended, slotting into place two hundred feet above Tom’s head.
April 6, 2013 — 6:49 PM
Marcus says:
Jacquie Creen had a face that could level cities.
April 6, 2013 — 6:51 PM
Gina M. Heron says:
I was born beneath a black veil of mourning, a dark bud blooming deep in its shadow.
April 6, 2013 — 7:01 PM
Damon says:
He said “I charge for that.”
April 6, 2013 — 7:01 PM
MarcelleLiemant says:
Nile Collins waited impatiently for his head to be reattached after his recent beheading.
April 6, 2013 — 7:12 PM
Cylithria says:
It throbbed; I giggled.
April 6, 2013 — 7:21 PM
David Zampa says:
If a stranger ever hands you an orange envelope without a word of explanation, do NOT open the damn thing.
April 6, 2013 — 7:22 PM
Elinor (@marjamma) says:
“Holy shit, the bread machine is not supposed to do that”, she thought as she surveyed the carnage in the kitchen; it was far too early on a Sunday morning and she needed a very strong coffee before she could face calling the cops.
April 6, 2013 — 7:47 PM
K. Tagher says:
I don’t have a gun or a fast acting poison, but at least I can shut off my suit’s oxygen.
April 6, 2013 — 8:13 PM
Aaron Clark (@RageTheme) says:
Captain Obvious deserves knuckles, full set, right in the mouth.
April 6, 2013 — 8:18 PM
K. A. Burton (@whipsandquills) says:
Disappearing wasn’t all that difficult.
April 6, 2013 — 8:33 PM
Coalprin says:
The floor shuddered beneath my feet; I’d always known that I was going to go out in a blaze of glory, but this was just ridiculous.
April 6, 2013 — 8:39 PM
edevine says:
Why this, again?
April 6, 2013 — 9:09 PM