Last week’s challenge: “The Secret Door.”
I love a good opening line.
You lead with a great first line in a story, man, that’s just hooks you right away, doesn’t it? It’s like a key to a door. Opens up the world and your interest in it lickety-split.
So, that’s what I want from you.
I want you to write one opening line.
And then I’ll pick three.
And if those three people are in the United States, I’ll send them a copy of my book, The Blue Blazes, when it comes out. If you’re in the UK or anywhere else across the big wide world, you may have to settle for a digital copy, but I’ll make sure to get you one just the same.
Now, some rules:
A line means one sentence, not two, not three.
You get one entry, not two, not three.
Put your entry in the comments below.
I’ll pick three of my favorites by the close of Thursday the 11th (11:59PM) and then the following challenge next Friday will be for you folks to pick one of the three opening lines and write a story based on it. Which means you also might want to take a gander at these suggestions:
Shorter is better than longer.
Try too to keep in mind that you’re writing an opening line for other stories; the trick is to write something engaging while still writing a line that could apply to a great many styles and genres of story. Something that appeals and hooks in this case not just readers but other writers, too.
You’re writing lines for potential, is my point.
That’s how I’ll pick my favorites. Based on their potential to make interesting stories.
So! You’ve got a little less than one week.
One opening line. Let’s see what you’ve got.
Lisa L says:
I was seventeen the first time I died.
April 5, 2013 — 8:59 AM
Ryan Viergutz says:
How many more times did you die? 😀
April 5, 2013 — 12:14 PM
Lisa L says:
Ahh, now that would be telling 🙂
April 6, 2013 — 11:31 AM
Ryan V says:
Hah, I guess you are right. Now you should write the story so I can read it. 😀
April 6, 2013 — 1:24 PM
Phil Norris says:
Rick staggered upright exhausted from the fight, thoughts of freedom vanishing like the an early morning mist, looking out across the plain the grass was black and full of thunder.
April 5, 2013 — 9:01 AM
Ruth Dupre says:
Pinch me– I ain’t dead yet.
April 5, 2013 — 9:03 AM
emmafrederickss says:
Amy crunched her granola at the breakfast table and wondered whether to tell the others that they would all be dead by days-end or let it be a surprise.
April 5, 2013 — 9:07 AM
Sarah Wedgbrow says:
The starlings cried out on my approach, but I carried a hunch and a proton pack.
April 5, 2013 — 9:08 AM
Elizabeth Poole says:
Love this one!
April 5, 2013 — 10:19 AM
Kelly says:
The other kids used to look up to superheroes, but I always knew the truth – villains get results.
April 5, 2013 — 9:12 AM
Beth L. says:
Like it.
April 5, 2013 — 9:51 AM
Shonnerz says:
I love it!
April 5, 2013 — 10:32 AM
Matt Gomez says:
As I pulled the bloody knife from my side, I knew that I should have just stayed in bed today.
April 5, 2013 — 9:13 AM
Col Bury says:
“Things started to look a bit grim the day me cock fell off.”
(Opening line from my zombie story published in the charity anthology, Nightfalls. Don’t think I’m eligible to enter, but just thought I’d share it.)
April 5, 2013 — 9:13 AM
Travis Cole says:
“Who the fuck would give Lucifer a baby?” Skylin screamed in her whiskey kissed Boston Brogue.
April 5, 2013 — 9:13 AM
adstarrling says:
The little girl stared into the dead man’s eyes, her expression steady and unflinching.
April 5, 2013 — 9:16 AM
zeros83 says:
For my thirtieth birthday, I was given the cinerary urn containing my mother’s remains.
April 5, 2013 — 9:16 AM
Erotica Darling (@EroticaDarling) says:
Hamish was surprised when the door was opened by a starfish.
April 5, 2013 — 9:17 AM
Justine Spencer says:
I’d rather die than say the words out loud.
April 5, 2013 — 9:19 AM
Joe Selby says:
There is always a singular instant, a domino moment, when What Is deviates from What Should Be and becomes What If.
April 5, 2013 — 9:19 AM
Shelly Tennyson Taylor says:
The year was 1853 and the West was truly wild.
April 5, 2013 — 9:22 AM
JenW says:
The woman on the news was talking about someone else who had disappeared.
April 5, 2013 — 9:28 AM
Peter Schuyler says:
I used to be a deaf, dumb, and blind martial artist before things went bad.
April 5, 2013 — 9:30 AM
jay wolf says:
It hadn’t been very long; certainly, not long enough.
April 5, 2013 — 9:30 AM
Terry Irving says:
Jake blinked repeatedly to bring the medicine cabinet into focus and muttered to himself as he shook out the pills, “OK, buproprion for depression, respiridol to keep those fucking delusions quiet, aspirin, multi-vitamin, and…clonazepam to calm me down or adderal to keep me sharp…tough choice…but.someone IS trying to kill me so adderal it is.”
April 5, 2013 — 9:37 AM
Sean P Reardon says:
The people in the woods wear black hooded robes, have oblong white faces, and black dots for eyes..
April 5, 2013 — 9:38 AM
decayingorbits says:
Cinders fell like softly glowing snowflakes, dusting the sidewalk with deadly, radioactive ash.
April 5, 2013 — 9:39 AM
Girl Friday says:
Nice.
April 5, 2013 — 1:37 PM
Carl says:
Of all the women who want to kill me, there’s only one I’m truly afraid of.
April 5, 2013 — 9:41 AM
teckro says:
the mind is like a door, it can’t open itself, and sometimes it just needs a key
April 5, 2013 — 9:44 AM
Elaina M. Roberts says:
One year, seven months, and nineteen days.
April 5, 2013 — 9:45 AM
Grace Black says:
I watch the discharge of breath dissipate inside the cab of my faded red Chevy.
April 5, 2013 — 9:51 AM
disastrouscreations says:
The heavy woman put the scalpel down, and covered her ears to mute the screams.
April 5, 2013 — 10:00 AM
scottweberwriter says:
Sometimes a man had to be a man, but this was not that time.
April 5, 2013 — 10:00 AM
splishims says:
Love this!
April 5, 2013 — 12:24 PM
awkwardtreed says:
It’s late.
April 5, 2013 — 10:06 AM
greg says:
And there it was.
April 5, 2013 — 10:06 AM
gregmulka says:
Kara tried to catch her breath as her failure bled into the dirt.
April 5, 2013 — 10:09 AM
v0brien says:
It’s impossible to compete with a vice.
April 5, 2013 — 10:09 AM
Nicole Dillie says:
After he failed out of medical school, he decided to make bombs.
April 5, 2013 — 10:16 AM
Elizabeth Poole says:
I knew I shouldn’t be here.
April 5, 2013 — 10:20 AM
Joe Hart says:
It was 9 a.m. when the first body fell past my window.
April 5, 2013 — 10:25 AM
Terry Irving says:
Nice
April 5, 2013 — 11:42 AM
Girl Friday says:
Love it!
April 5, 2013 — 1:37 PM
cincoflex says:
The hardest thing about holding eyeballs in your mouth is not choking on the optic nerves as they try to slither down the back of your throat.
April 5, 2013 — 10:26 AM
Shonnerz says:
Oh my…
April 5, 2013 — 10:33 AM
disastrouscreations says:
One of my favorites so far.
April 5, 2013 — 10:26 AM
disastrouscreations says:
This was supposed to be a reply. I’m not sure how it ended up here.
April 5, 2013 — 10:29 AM
John Minor says:
This is why people don’t go on picnics anymore.
April 5, 2013 — 10:33 AM
Robert Mitchell says:
Sweet!
April 6, 2013 — 9:00 AM
jrmurdock says:
I stood looking down at half of my friend’s body, no trace of his lower half.
April 5, 2013 — 10:34 AM
Shonnerz says:
“I should have never followed that fucking rabbit…”
April 5, 2013 — 10:34 AM
sarahwedgbrow says:
always follow the rabbit 😉 (this is great)
April 5, 2013 — 10:52 PM
Cat York says:
I never trusted that statue in the garden behind the house.
April 5, 2013 — 10:36 AM
Joshua Wilner (@thejoshuawilner) says:
It is never a good idea to sleep with the priest’s daughter in the rabbi’s bed.
April 5, 2013 — 10:39 AM
Rich says:
“You have to seduce him for me,” my brother says, face pale from either the washed-out webcam or from honest-to-God love sickness.
April 5, 2013 — 10:43 AM
Heather Marsten says:
I hate boys’ games.
April 5, 2013 — 10:44 AM
Troo says:
Deliquesced isn’t a word most people get to use during the working day.
April 5, 2013 — 10:54 AM
Laura says:
“So why’d you do it?”
April 5, 2013 — 11:07 AM
Denise Lewis says:
Circling to land at Kuka Mai Lumba’s dusty airstrip, I got a view of my new home and understood why they call it ‘culture shock’ and not ‘culture pleasant surprise’.
April 5, 2013 — 11:11 AM
Rafael Marquez says:
All I could think was “dafuq?”
April 5, 2013 — 11:11 AM
Jeff Hemenway says:
Greta sat cross-legged on the attic floor, the little pink balloon tugging upward at her wrist, and stared slit-eyed at the locked wooden door – only thirteen hours until her birthday was finally over.
April 5, 2013 — 11:19 AM
Jaclyn (@jaxcinthe) says:
The disappearances were generally accepted by the entire town — even expected.
April 5, 2013 — 11:25 AM