Flash Fiction Challenge: “The Opening Lines, Revealed”
Ahem, ahem.
Hear ye, hear ye.
Here are the three opening lines I’ve chosen:
Brendan Gannon: “Everyone else remembers it as the day the saucers came, but I remember it as the day a man in a suit shot my father.”
Joe Parrino: “Three truths will I tell you and one lie.”
Delilah Dawson: “Thursday was out to get me.”
This was, as so many contests here are anymore, a tough one to pick. Nearly 200 entries (!) and many of them good. (Though, pro-tip: bad spelling and/or typos will never help you win here.)
Here’s roughly what I ended up looking for:
I wanted lines that told multiple potential stories. Meaning, a writer could read it and find a world of stories coming out of that one line — not just the one obvious one, say. Some lines were very specific to a genre or to an event and so I hesitated using them, despite their inherent awesomeness. The exception here might be the “saucer” one, but it was so cool I had to use it. Don’t judge me.
So, the three who won:
Contact me, I shall hook you up with a copy of Bait Dog.
(Bait Dog is now available, by the way. Just $2.99 until next Wednesday. Plug, plug, hint, hint.)
Everybody else:
You’ve got 1000 words.
Write a story using one of the above opening lines.
Due by Friday, Aug 17th, at noon EST. Post online, link in the comments.
You know the drill.


Icarus Mortis
August 10, 2012 at 10:29 AM //
“I wanted lines that told multiple potential stories.”
It was a good learning experience. I tried to think on from mine after I posted it, only then to realise how restrictive it was. I guess if I can’t be creative with it from the start, how is the reader?
Darlene Underdahl
August 10, 2012 at 10:49 AM //
I didn’t win (sniffle), but I bought Bait Dog anyway. And I preordered Blake Crouch’s Pines. I’m going totally badass. I need to do some writing.
Paul Baxter
August 10, 2012 at 10:57 AM //
Darkene, glad to hear that you’re going totally badass, because HALFassed badass would just be confusing.
Casz Brewster
August 10, 2012 at 11:33 AM //
So, here’s how they look to me:
1. Sci Fi
2. Fantasy / Fairy Tale and/or Horror
3. Crime/Thriller.
I always write #1 & #2. Perhaps I should try #3?
Just curious which one pulls everyone else the most?
Erik Mason
August 10, 2012 at 12:22 PM //
Here’s my effort for #1.
The Day the Saucers Came:
http://geekonablog.blogspot.com/2012/08/story-day-saucers-came.html
I hope you enjoy it!
Bryon Quertermous
August 10, 2012 at 1:05 PM //
Booooooooooooo. This is because I questioned your creativity advice isn’t it? Boooooooooo *throws zombie hand back at Chuck*
Darlene Underdahl
August 10, 2012 at 3:50 PM //
The Lie
http://darlene.underdahl.net/?p=174
Richard
August 10, 2012 at 4:41 PM //
I wrote this on my phone, so please forgive any Autocorrect flubs I failed to catch in editing. It runs 991 words and is called The Forgotten Song of the Pink Rage. Enjoy.
http://byrichardlake.blogspot.com/2012/08/the-forgotten-song-of-pink-rage.html
Richard
August 10, 2012 at 5:57 PM //
I believe I may have screwed up royally here by misreading the instructions. “Opening line” you say? Oops. Disqualify me immediately from the fabulous prize package.
Michael
August 10, 2012 at 6:08 PM //
http://innocentsaccidentshints.blogspot.com/2012/08/terrible-minds-challenge-than-anything.html
Bronson O'Quinn
August 10, 2012 at 6:47 PM //
I’m taking the first one, but I’ll be damned if I’ll be pigeonholed into a specific genre!
“Suits and Saucers”
http://www.disposabletea.com/2012/08/the-opening-lines-revealed.html
Decaying Orbits
August 10, 2012 at 7:10 PM //
I’m going to count this as my first official rejection letter. I can’t decide which line to use. Decisions, decisions.
R Thomas Allwin
August 10, 2012 at 7:10 PM //
Well, I bought Bait Dog before the winners were chosen, so I’ll just tell myself that Chuck decided it would be better to pick people who didn’t have it already… I like both the first and the last line equally.
Smash
August 10, 2012 at 8:48 PM //
It’s been a while, but I’m back this week. Not very creative with the title, but this is “Thursday.”
http://thepantslesswonder.blogspot.com/2012/08/thursday-flash-fiction-challenge.html
Shiri Sondheimer
August 10, 2012 at 10:11 PM //
*hangs head*
Seriously ashamed of my typos.
My chief critique-r (also knows as my husband) read this little piece and said, “I like it, but I don’t get it.” To which I was forced to reply, “I’m not sure I get it either.” Forced my brain in a direction different than that in which the line wanted to take me. On the other side of this link is the 940 words my brain barfed up in response to the challenge. Or protest. Possibly surrender…
http://swsondheimer.wordpress.com/this-just-in/saucers/
Nicki Ivey
August 11, 2012 at 3:26 PM //
I was really excited by the saucers and suit opening line, and kind of even really like where it took me. It was an interesting first experience with one of these challenges.
http://offthebeatenplan.com/fiction/killsuit-or-the-day-the-saucers-came/
Max
August 11, 2012 at 5:18 PM //
The Man Who Shot My Father
http://mjrhsstories.blogspot.co.uk/2012/08/the-man-who-shot-my-father.html
Considered trying to play around with “saucer” but looks like others got there first!
Erin H
August 11, 2012 at 6:55 PM //
I chose #2. I hope you believe it sucks less than being poked in the eye.
http://deafchickie.tumblr.com/
Robin Dunn
August 11, 2012 at 10:51 PM //
Thanks for the cool prompts. Got 900 good words out of the Thursday one
Cheers- RWD
BJ Kerry
August 12, 2012 at 11:41 AM //
My Story
http://kerry-mutterings.blogspot.ie/2012/08/chuck-wendig-flash-fiction-challenge.html
AB Singer
August 12, 2012 at 12:00 PM //
This would be mine. Nasty, nasty thoughts you gave me…
http://ultravioletandinfrared.blogspot.co.uk/2012/08/the-story-teller.html
Shedrick
August 12, 2012 at 1:16 PM //
So, here’s mine–based on “Everyone else remembers it as the day the saucers came, but I remember it as the day a man in a suit shot my father.”
Calling Down the Stars: http://serialdistractions.com/2012/08/12/calling-down-the-stars/
Ben
August 12, 2012 at 2:14 PM //
http://cinaphile.blogspot.com/2012/08/three-truths-and-lie.html
David Grigg
August 13, 2012 at 3:38 AM //
Funny, I never intended to pick this sentence, but then I got an idea.
It’s a little over length again, but not too much, I hope.
It’s called (boringly): The Day the Saucers Came. http://narratorium.com/2012/08/13/the-day-the-saucers-came/
Josh Loomis
August 13, 2012 at 7:41 AM //
Like others, I chose “Thursday” for a title. Not sure how many others chose this particular subject, though.
http://www.blueinkalchemy.com/2012/08/13/flash-fiction-thursday/
Phil Norris
August 13, 2012 at 9:51 AM //
I’ve gone for “Thursday was out to get me” and here is my little offering called “Bad Day”
http://philnorris63.wordpress.com/2012/08/13/bad-day-short-story/
J.M. Dow
August 13, 2012 at 12:51 PM //
I went with the “saucers” sentence, but because it was so OBVIOUSLY science fiction, I decided I absolutely did not want to write a sci-fi story. I took saucers a little more literally in this instance, and I came up with a sort of…heist-like story.
http://whirlingnerdish.blogspot.com/2012/08/flash-fiction-challenge-thirteenth.html
Beth L.
August 13, 2012 at 9:57 PM //
Can’t resist three truths and one lie! I give you The Fool.
http://knotachance.tumblr.com/
Jo Eberhardt
August 14, 2012 at 2:11 AM //
This was kinda fun. I had story ideas for all three opening lines, but finally decided to go with option two. I give you:
The Game
Jim Franklin
August 14, 2012 at 8:50 AM //
I chose number three. It turns out I really need to work on my titles because this one is called ‘Hunted by Thursday’.
http://www.thezombiechimp.com/2012/08/14/flash-fiction-hunted-by-thursday/
I would love to know what you think.
Tim Whitcher
August 14, 2012 at 5:18 PM //
I’m drawing a blank. This sucks.
Casz Brewster
August 14, 2012 at 7:01 PM //
I started to write something really creepy and stalker-ish and it turned out more cutesy. It is what it is. I hope you like it.
I chose: Thursday was out to get me.
http://www.casondrabrewster.com/?p=809
Cari Hislop
August 15, 2012 at 10:39 AM //
“Everyone else remembers it as the day the saucers came, but I remember it as the day a man in a suit shot my father…”
“Your old man was run over by a lawn mower. Suits and Saucers my ass…”
http://blogspot.regencyromancenovels.com/?p=3013#more-3013
Esme Pilbeam
August 15, 2012 at 2:53 PM //
Elizabethan Dread
by Esme Pilbeam
Three truths will I tell you and one lie, only this and no more.
My time is short. They will be coming for me soon. I pray there will be time enough to conclude this Confession before the axe separates my head from the rest of my body.
Mike
August 16, 2012 at 11:42 AM //
I had an idea to do a twist on ‘saucers’, but after a quick scan I think the twist would be to actually have flying saucers in the story. Sigh. Thinking cap back on.
Jeremy Jones
August 16, 2012 at 12:09 PM //
I went with the three truths I will tell you, and one lie.
Cheers!
http://alleywayrover.blogspot.com/2012/08/the-kook-thief-tyrant-skeptic-and.html
Leslie
August 16, 2012 at 2:00 PM //
Saucers!
My offering: http://lesannberry.com/2012/08/messy-business.html
Scott Weber
August 16, 2012 at 2:02 PM //
Love this challenge. I have always felt that some days were better than other so I chose “Thursday was out to get me”.
Usually you say something like that when you have a string of bad luck, but maybe, just maybe the day really is out to get you.
http://scottweberwriter.wordpress.com/2012/08/16/thursday-was-out-to-get-me-chuck-wendig-story-challenge/
M. A. Brotherton
August 17, 2012 at 12:05 AM //
This turned out to be a lot more difficult than I thought it would be:
http://mabrotherton.com/flash-fiction-the-accident/
Jenna Bird
August 17, 2012 at 4:37 AM //
I overshot the word limit. I have trouble feeling shame about that, since most times I don’t make it TO the limit, or within 100 words. (And I cut the ending short/rushed to not go too far past the limit – and because it was 2:30 in the morning…)
I picked: “Thursday was out to get me.”
http://jennaelf.blogspot.com/2012/08/flash-fiction-challenge-opening-line.html
Icarus Mortis
August 17, 2012 at 5:28 AM //
Finally finished my entry; what a challenge, but a good one.
I (ab)used Brendan’s line to write: Dustbin > Erase All; 1,000 words exactly! O_O
http://blog.icarusmortis.co.uk/2012/08/17/dustbin-erase-all/
Ilona
August 17, 2012 at 9:01 AM //
I’m afraid I modified the line to fit a voice rather than fit the voice around the line, but at least it’s short! 354 words: Implications
http://ilonatherose.wordpress.com/implications/
I actually thought, when embarking on last week’s challenge, that we would have to continue on with our own opening lines, so I built an entire world around my sentence (Cherish your freedom, little brother, there’s no such thing as boredom in the Badlands). And now I’m darn well going to write that story – stay tuned, you three people who follow my blog!
Erin M. Hartshorn
August 17, 2012 at 11:09 AM //
Mine just went up this morning. “Going to Get You.” http://www.erinmhartshorn.com/flash-going-to-get-you/
Mike
August 17, 2012 at 11:48 AM //
Looking at the other entries, it seems like a twist would have been to use the first line and write about flying saucers, not dishes. Oh well, still had fun with this.
http://www.ravensview.ca/ravens/2012/08/the-saucers.html
Mike
August 18, 2012 at 1:50 PM //
I liked the story by Beth L. – would love to comment but unfortunately it’s one of those Tumblr accounts.
http://knotachance.tumblr.com/
Sarah O'Hara
October 12, 2012 at 4:36 AM //
Interesting, but I’d much rather write my own.