This challenge is, as many of them are, both simple and complex, both easy and difficult.
I want you to write a story in five sentences.
No more than 100 words.
You can view it, if you’d like, as:
Sentence 1: Beginning / Inciting Incident
Sentence 2: Middle
Sentence 3: Middle peak, act turn or pivot
Sentence 4: Climactic turn or twist
Sentence 5: Resolution
That is not a strict map, but rather, a reminder that a story is a story, not a snapshot: it has a beginning, a middle and an end.
You can post it below in the comments if you’d like, or if you’d prefer to post at your blog and offer a link back, that’s fine, too.
Please, only one story. Do not spam the comments with a ton of these.
Just one.
So, make it count.
Due by next Friday, the 18th, at noon EST.
Liz says:
https://innergoddesslizzy.wordpress.com/2016/03/10/write-a-story-in-5-sentences/
March 11, 2016 — 12:16 AM
Donald jessop says:
He sat in a corner of the hotel lounge, alone. As he gently swirled his fifteen-year-old scotch he glanced up and saw her entering the lounge wearing a deep red, body-hugging sheath.
She scanned the room somewhat nervously until she saw what she had come for, a smile blossoming on her face and it broke his heart as that smile wasn’t for him.
He lowered the drink to the table and stood up.
He would confront her tomorrow when she came home from her “sisters” apartment but for tonight he would leave his wife and her lover alone.
March 11, 2016 — 12:25 AM
disperser says:
The Pen (title not counted toward 100 words goal)
(99 words, per Word)
I looked all over. I checked the car, even under the sofa cushions. My favorite pen was gone.
I stood there, looking around. The glass Jeb had used sat there, by the notepad.
Grabbing the baseball bat sitting by the door, I ran out. Jeb turned the corner up ahead.
Running, I followed him. There he was, squatting in front of a homeless man. His hand extended, he offered my pen to the man.
I stopped. The man’s face beamed and started drawing on a well-worn notebook. I turned and left. The pen was better off where it was.
March 11, 2016 — 12:58 AM
disperser says:
Forgot to link the blog, in case anyone cares.
https://dispersertracks.com/2016/03/11/a-bit-of-flash-and-cruisers-ix/
March 11, 2016 — 2:11 AM
Mr Urban Spaceman says:
Wow, your protagonist really likes their pen! A sweet story, though.
March 11, 2016 — 3:41 AM
disperser says:
Had it been me, I would have grabbed my machete. My mother took my pen once . . . Once!
March 11, 2016 — 10:13 AM
thedebc says:
Awww nice ending
March 13, 2016 — 6:26 PM
Mr Urban Spaceman says:
I love this challenge! My story is entitled ‘Colony’ and is exactly 100 words.
https://mrurbanspaceman.wordpress.com/2016/03/11/colony-a-flash-fiction-piece/
March 11, 2016 — 1:39 AM
Mr Urban Spaceman says:
The link to my story disappeared into an “…awaiting moderation.” abyss. -__- But for anyone who wants to read it, just click my name.
March 15, 2016 — 4:57 PM
James R Cheary says:
The Infinity Knot (79 words)
The device on Jared’s wrist blinked yellow, then red, as the concussion of heat and light consumed him. Rigged explosives super-heated the air, shredding the research department. His eyes jarred open, desperate for light in the darkened room; his room, he recognized the familiar lamp and alarm clock on the nightstand. The chronometer read thirty-six hours. For the third time today, Jared dressed and set out to prevent commercial time-travel, and Alister Cooper’s rise to power.
March 11, 2016 — 1:46 AM
maryblackhill says:
I really like this, but it seems like the start of a story, not the story in and of itself. (I’d like to read the rest of it!)
March 11, 2016 — 4:47 AM
Mr Urban Spaceman says:
The action and narrative here is really tight and well controlled (much like the explosion, I suspect!). I do agree with maryblackhill (though I think my story suffers from the same ‘problem’ too). I love time-travel stories and would definitely like to read more.
March 11, 2016 — 7:30 AM
thedebc says:
This sounds exciting 🙂
March 13, 2016 — 6:13 PM
Liz says:
Seven of us sat at a round table with grim expressions.
It was my turn.
I spun the barrel, and pointed the revolver at my head.
The gun only clicked.
I lost.
March 11, 2016 — 1:55 AM
Mr Urban Spaceman says:
Haha, nice! I like how you moved the twist to the end of the story.
March 11, 2016 — 3:35 AM
maryblackhill says:
Intriguing.
March 11, 2016 — 4:46 AM
Ashleigh says:
Great job! Only 32 words and I’m hooked! The twist was a nice touch.
March 11, 2016 — 9:11 AM
jennnanigans says:
Awesome! What I like about this is all the questions I’m left with.
March 11, 2016 — 9:19 AM
john freeter says:
nice.
March 11, 2016 — 10:11 AM
folkool says:
Simple but compelling. Nice work.
March 11, 2016 — 11:48 AM
Jinxie G says:
Wow. Love this!
March 11, 2016 — 2:03 PM
boundbeautifunk says:
Brevity is sexy as all get out!
March 11, 2016 — 10:32 PM
thisdamnkid says:
I really like this one, very simple and very to the point.
March 11, 2016 — 11:45 PM
Nicole Broussard says:
Very nice; you win!
March 12, 2016 — 7:11 PM
thedebc says:
Eek, surprise ending ! Well done 🙂
March 13, 2016 — 6:11 PM
kirajessup says:
This is fantastic and done so succinctly.
March 14, 2016 — 8:49 PM
dcxli says:
The Petty Video Game Dispute
https://dcxli.wordpress.com/2016/03/10/the-petty-video-game-dispute/
March 11, 2016 — 2:02 AM
Write Your Wrongs says:
The smell the flesh burning singed my nostrils, but watching them actually eating it was the worst part.
I thought it was customary to kill an animal before the slaughter, but I was wrong.
These people cared not for etiquette or table manners, just meat.
Tied down with my leg over the fire, the pain was already too far gone to feel anymore.
They ate their meal and I watched as the world around me spun with the rotisserie.
March 11, 2016 — 2:52 AM
maryblackhill says:
Ugh! Gruesome. Powerful though.
March 11, 2016 — 4:47 AM
Write Your Wrongs says:
Thank you! Glad you like it!
March 16, 2016 — 11:32 AM
jennnanigans says:
Having just rewatched Ravenous for the umpteenth time, this has a special place in my heart.
And I LOVE the last line!
March 11, 2016 — 9:20 AM
Write Your Wrongs says:
Thanks! I’ll have to check that out!
March 16, 2016 — 11:33 AM
disperser says:
A tasty piece of fiction.
March 11, 2016 — 12:19 PM
Write Your Wrongs says:
Isn’t it? Lol. Thanks for the comment.
March 16, 2016 — 11:34 AM
Paz Spera says:
Loved it, beware of smooth-talking meat-eaters
March 11, 2016 — 1:36 PM
Write Your Wrongs says:
They have their charm… Beware.
March 16, 2016 — 11:37 AM
thisdamkid says:
MMMM, delicious.
March 12, 2016 — 12:32 PM
Write Your Wrongs says:
Thank you.
March 16, 2016 — 11:36 AM
thedebc says:
This reminds me of an episode on the Walking Dead! Scary!
March 13, 2016 — 6:12 PM
Write Your Wrongs says:
Haha! We all have the risk of being on the rotisserie from time to time. Thank you.
March 16, 2016 — 11:35 AM
rainerenee@gmail.com says:
when I was five, my teddy bear kissed me.
when I was ten, I got my first bra in brown wrapping paper, from London, from my aunt, because it was cheap.
when I was twenty-seven, I was fired from my desk job and took up bar-tending in KL, mixing non-alcoholic cocktails.
when I was forty-nine, I was evicted from my apartment because my neighbour played too much air guitar and blamed it on me.
when I was sixty-one, I died and went to heaven: most productive thing I did this morning.
(87, hope you like it)
March 11, 2016 — 3:09 AM
maryblackhill says:
He walked out of the prison cage and captured her eyes with his.
He was not what she wanted, not what she needed, but his dark eyes fixed on hers and she knew.
She knew she would say yes.
“Yes, come home with me, love me and be with me forever.”
She knew she was lost the moment he whined and licked her hand.
March 11, 2016 — 4:44 AM
codenamenox says:
I think my heart just melted. It started out with the promise of super-creepy, and turned into pure beauty. Bravo!
March 11, 2016 — 7:12 AM
Ashleigh says:
I agree with codenamenox,you did a great job moving the story from creepy to beauty. There was and audible “awww” from me when I got to the end. The symbolism of the prison was perfect for the emotional flip. Awesome job!
March 11, 2016 — 9:16 AM
dcxli says:
The ending made this. Cutest thing I’ve read in a long time.
March 11, 2016 — 10:59 AM
denmaniacs4 says:
Heartbreaking and lovely, with, of course, a completely comforting twist at the end, where, I believe, most twists should be.
March 11, 2016 — 11:31 AM
disperser says:
Nice.
March 11, 2016 — 12:20 PM
boundbeautifunk says:
This makes my heart go awwww. So good!
March 11, 2016 — 10:32 PM
Simon Billinton says:
Nice twist at the end 🙂
March 12, 2016 — 4:58 AM
Nicole Broussard says:
Ahh! It’s the hand licking that gets me every time. Good!
March 12, 2016 — 7:13 PM
thedebc says:
Love it!!! Super surprise ending. 🙂
March 13, 2016 — 6:14 PM
hardboiledbaby says:
Sweet 🙂
March 20, 2016 — 3:12 AM
maryblackhill says:
I probably ought to call this True Love or something like that…..
March 11, 2016 — 4:48 AM
Sevent x Seven says:
Three days after the funeral we found ourselves, inevitably, back at the grave side. It had been one of those hot Southern summers where everyone took to carrying towels for their sweating brows – that would only make the rot worse. We watched the soil stir, slower and weaker than usual, the creature below too decomposed to properly exhume itself. One blow from my shovel was it all took to put the thing back in the ground, permanently this time.
“Goodbye again, momma.”
March 11, 2016 — 5:23 AM
hardboiledbaby says:
Heh, good one!
March 20, 2016 — 3:13 AM
Alexandra says:
My radio alarm blasted me awake with the news, and Lulu pawed my arm.
With no time to wash my face, I wriggled into a dress and snapped Lulu’s leash to her collar.
I careened through thick morning traffic like a fire truck, while Lulu dug her claws into the back seat.
My parking space was filled with a limousine; I blocked it with the Mini Cooper and Lulu hopped out to pee.
With arms full of Lulu and proof, I crashed through the door just in time to grab the gun from his hand and let him live.
March 11, 2016 — 5:41 AM
Alexandra says:
Hmm…wondering why my post has been “awaiting moderation” for so long. Lulu is also puzzled.
March 14, 2016 — 3:37 AM
Andrew F. Butters says:
You Have Memories To Look Back On Today
Seven years ago we lost him. Recently, Facebook introduced a memories feature that recaps your day from years past. I’ve been wondering what those memories would look like from the day he died and how I would deal with them. Turning memories off altogether, or for a specific day, is an option but that day is also my birthday. I will leave the feature on and try to create more good memories so I will be reminded of how much I am loved as I scroll … scroll … scroll towards the bottom and remember how much he is missed.
March 11, 2016 — 6:47 AM
John LaTorre says:
14:46, 03/11/11
The swaying of my roach-infested apartment lasted long enough for me to consider grabbing my wallet.
When the whole building jumped a few inches I knew it was time to go.
I ran with the strangers living next to me down the stairs as the concrete roared around us.
We burst outside expecting chaos, but other than a broken wine bottle and a siren wailing far away, nothing had changed.
After a desperate cigarette, I went back inside the home I could no longer trust to watch people die and worry for months that I might be next.
March 11, 2016 — 6:51 AM
thedebc says:
Good tension
March 13, 2016 — 6:28 PM
codenamenox says:
Hey, fellow word people! Here’s my story:
A Night Out
(80 words)
“Red dress and biker boots at three o’clock, headed this way – so better turn that frown upside down, sugar,” says the redhead sitting across the table from me.
“I don’t recall asking you to be my wingman.”
He laughs, blowing out a cloud of smoke, and shakes the ash off his cigarette into my drink.
The brunette in the red dress stops next to my table and smiles.
“So what’s a cute guy like you doing sitting all by himself?”
March 11, 2016 — 7:03 AM
Ashleigh says:
So many questions! I so want to know more. This seems like a great set up but still a complete piece. Nice work.
March 11, 2016 — 9:20 AM
folkool says:
This is definitely a intriguing glimpse into two characters! I’d love to see where you could take them.
March 11, 2016 — 11:56 AM
maryblackhill says:
Oooh – so the wingman is imaginary/invisible. Lovely set up -= but I want more.
March 11, 2016 — 1:16 PM
boundbeautifunk says:
I adore the twist. So fun! So many questions!
March 11, 2016 — 10:34 PM
Nicole Broussard says:
This took me a minute, but it’s great, sugar!
March 12, 2016 — 7:14 PM
thedebc says:
Ha, ha … Fun. Great dialogue
March 13, 2016 — 6:16 PM
Mozette says:
Bad Eggs
We all awoke to them in our gardens, overflowing in the streets, filling up our beaches – and yet the government told us they were harmless.
So, we gathered them all and handed them in; as many as we could.
However, there were always a few we missed and we found them – but we couldn’t hand them in anymore…then, they began to hatch!
And we found out why we couldn’t get in touch with our government… and there was nowhere to run!
March 11, 2016 — 7:17 AM
Mozette says:
And yes… I’ve been watching a lot of ‘Buffy the Vampire Slayer’ 😛
March 11, 2016 — 7:18 AM
Mr Urban Spaceman says:
I love that episode of Buffy; Xander’s cheating really made me laugh. I think if you could rework this to use a few less conjuctions (there’s a whole heap of ‘but’ ‘and’ ‘however’ for such a short piece) then it would flow a little more fluidly.
You definitely don’t want but-face 😉
March 11, 2016 — 7:36 AM
Mozette says:
Hahaha… no, I don’t want but-face like Giles 😛
thanks, though… wrote this one off the cuff. 😀
March 11, 2016 — 8:05 AM
maryblackhill says:
Great story – but I agree with the above: it needs a lot of tightening.
March 11, 2016 — 1:18 PM
thedebc says:
This sounds like a novel I’d like to read 🙂
March 13, 2016 — 6:17 PM
Amos Knoll says:
The seed of Humanity ©
in 100 words & 5 sentences
Michael looked up at the sky as if to say God is this beautiful planet the one you want me to save from mankind self-destruction.
Confused and bewildered he thought what a waist man has done upon him-self.
He stood in front of the mirror seeing his own reflection with full satisfaction knowing he did the right thing.
Michael came to earth to save mankind not realizing that at all times he was a man’s alter ego.
As he departing Michael knew his seed upon mankind will better humanity for all its beauty and knowledge that he bestowed upon mankind.
March 11, 2016 — 7:45 AM
thedebc says:
The Archangel?
March 13, 2016 — 6:27 PM
C. B. Matson says:
This morning, of all mornings, the damned car doesn’t stay in park; instead, it goes cladunk and lurches backward, growling, and squealing the brakes. Bloody hell and sonofabitch, I shut it off and peer under the hood… something hopelessly jammed. Return to the driver’s seat, what now? Back out the driveway, circle over the neighbors law and goddam mailbox; back up the driveway and into the garage. Now, garage door down, trunk lid hard up against a crushed mass of bicycles and floor lamps, tires skidding, I wait.
March 11, 2016 — 8:46 AM
thedebc says:
I’d call that a bad day, go back into the house and pour myself a glass of wine lol
March 13, 2016 — 6:30 PM
jennnanigans says:
At The End Of The Day
I roll over just before the door opens, and lie still as steps cross the room.
Pressure on the mattress, and then two thumps as heavy work boots land on the floor.
A familiar sigh, and then a person-shaped coldness lies down and stretches out next to me. A hand like a glove left out in the snow touches my face.
“You knew I’d be back,” he says.
“Yes.” I close my eyes, eager for his smell of bay rum and old flannel. I only smell the formaldehyde, and wonder if it was worth it.
March 11, 2016 — 8:54 AM
john freeter says:
https://johnfreeter.wordpress.com/2016/03/11/intervention/
March 11, 2016 — 9:22 AM
Everet says:
Traveling at 80 mph, he grits his teeth, and the world streaks past. The office beckons for him to come and turn his gear in the great machine.
The oncoming headlights are blinding. Horns blare. Shattered glass hangs on the air, glittering like stars in the morning gloom.
Wreckage tears through his skin, untold stories of where he’s been. If only I had more time, he thinks.
The world blooms with reds and blacks. His pain is an orb of fading light.
The machine subtracts 1 from today’s calculation. An old pitted gear is replaced.
March 11, 2016 — 9:26 AM
Darkocean says:
Joe picked up the tattered bloid soaked sleave of Sams coat, all that was left of him after the grenade had gone off. Those bastards. He clutched it tigher, and shoved it into his pack.
Bending down he picked up his rifle, and loaded it.
The cowards were across the field, hiding behind the trees, like a bunch of disease ridden rats.
He worked his way over on his belly, avoiding the trip wires, and buried bombs.
There. Light reflected off of a korean man’s helmet. A quick death isn’t good enough for you.
The man spun around and fired. Joe fired back, the mans head ekoloaded, splattering his cherk with gore.
He looked down at his chest and his shirt seeped red. He collapsed.
I got you, I’ll drag you to hell.
Black clouds over came his vision, then he knew of nothing.
I’m sorry this got a little longer then I wanted.
March 11, 2016 — 9:33 AM
Darkocean says:
Sorry, about the typos my habit is to get it out first then fix it.
March 11, 2016 — 9:40 AM
thedebc says:
Very tense
March 13, 2016 — 6:32 PM
darkocean says:
Thank you 🙂
March 22, 2016 — 7:17 PM
greenrambler says:
As she swam up from the fog, the screeching continued to grow louder and louder.
She didn’t want to..REALLY didn’t want to…but she couldn’t stop herself from looking at her right side.
A medium-sized piece of her Momma’s pot roast was where her right hand should be, red and wet.
And her missing right hand was being juggled by the little Daschund in front of her, stained paws working mysteriously well- when the little dog somehow smiled at her and said “Shake a paw!”
She gulped, and the screeching stopped momentarily until she’d caught her breath, and then she started again.
March 11, 2016 — 9:48 AM
peri.fae says:
Untitled
(63 words)
Outside in the street, a man stands waiting for me.
He is tall, willow thin, and bleached a desert white.
Grinning a somber grin.
The monitor at my bedside beeps, the IV drips, my wife sleeps curled in the hospital chair.
I suppose it could be a woman waiting for me, grinning that lipless grin—in her condition there’s no way to tell.
March 11, 2016 — 9:52 AM
dcxli says:
Fantastic imagery. I could really see the withered visage.
March 11, 2016 — 11:05 AM
folkool says:
I agree; you provide just enough detail. This is an evocative little piece of writing.
March 11, 2016 — 12:12 PM
maryblackhill says:
Ah, nice one. It seems really churlish, when you’ve used one less word than I, to suggest that you could tighten it even further. But – here goes. Do you need that first “for me”? If you leave it out it makes the last sentence even more punchy. You wouldn’t give anything away by using “bone thin” in the second sentence either as it’s only with the last line that the reader understands he/she/it is a skeleton but it would make the “oh, of course” feeling even more powerful. I love this. (and I apologise for unasked for editing – very rude of me)
March 11, 2016 — 1:26 PM
Nicole Broussard says:
Liked this one, too. Nice visual.
March 12, 2016 — 7:16 PM
thedebc says:
Oooh this begs for more
March 13, 2016 — 6:20 PM
billthescribe says:
Nice one.
March 15, 2016 — 5:36 AM
dcxli says:
The Petty Video Game Dispute
Arthur seemed to be a man like any other—his favorite things included Cheetos, Fallout 3, and Emma Watson—but there was more to him than meets the eye. There has to be; there are only so many video games you could buy with a minimum wage salary. I have a theory, and it involves a string of robberies perpetrated by a man known as the Duct Tape Bandit: the day after the Bandit’s first strike, Arthur had a new copy of Skyrim; the day after the latest one, he had a new PS4. I informed the police of my suspicions and, on the grounds that he and the Duct Tape Bandit had never been seen in the same room, Arthur was arrested. It was just what he deserved, the perfect revenge for the time I had lent him my level 90 Mewtwo to fight the Elite Four and he had never traded it back.
March 11, 2016 — 9:59 AM
Paz Spera says:
Cool story!
March 11, 2016 — 1:40 PM
thedebc says:
Everyone Loves a mystery
March 13, 2016 — 6:55 PM
Ashleigh says:
Under the Bed
The monster was coming for her again, but this time she was ready with sword in hand.
Ever since her twenty-fifth birthday, no matter where she went, he came out of the shadows every third full moon, giving chase.
Lights beamed towards the room’s sole object, the bed she stood atop, listening to her racing heartbeat.
Nothing could be differentiated in the black mass of fur, she jumped, her aim centered, hopeful.
The sword broken by the sharp, glowing teeth and a furry, clawed hand held her wrist, the other caressing her cheek, he finally had her, no more running.
March 11, 2016 — 10:00 AM
codenamenox says:
Very satisfyingly scary. Even in a piece this short, I find myself rooting for the protagonist, and then genuinely distraught when the monster gets her.
It does, however, feel like the five-sentence limit did the style a disservice here. Most of these sentences would sound much more powerful if shorter.
Ex.: “The monster was coming for her again. This time, she was ready, sword in hand.” /
“A furry, clawed hand held her wrist, the other caressing her cheek. He finally had her. No more running.”
/unsolicited critique
March 11, 2016 — 5:02 PM
tygertygre says:
My thoughts exactly! I actually had to write it in separate sentences as you pointed out, then had to fuse them together. I didn’t get the run-on sentence warning after a few drafts so I left it at that. I will say that this project as really gotten some creative juices flowing 🙂
March 12, 2016 — 10:15 PM
cleefrost says:
Ooh…love this one! Excellent ending.
March 12, 2016 — 1:10 PM
tygertygre says:
Glad you like it!
March 12, 2016 — 10:16 PM
thedebc says:
Gotta love a monster under the bed lol!
March 13, 2016 — 6:23 PM
Ashleigh says:
That is certainly how I feel 🙂
March 16, 2016 — 11:23 AM
folkool says:
Annalise is getting nervous.
It’s been a week since her third date with David- the date where IT happened- and she hasn’t heard anything.
After work, she takes the interstate up to his vacation cabin and lets herself in through the kitchen window. Finds him sprawled out on the tacky, bloodstained linoleum like a limp and lifeless doll, permanent glassy-eyed stare of horror fixed on the wall.
Good, she thinks; just where I left you.
March 11, 2016 — 10:55 AM
dcxli says:
Great job. The last line was a really satisfying payoff.
March 11, 2016 — 11:08 AM
curleyqueue says:
Yes. VERY nice!
March 11, 2016 — 11:27 AM
denmaniacs4 says:
We can only hope that the second date with Annalise was a tad more enjoyable for David. Nicely done.
March 11, 2016 — 11:36 AM
Mel says:
Yesss! Well done! It was indeed quite satisfying.
March 11, 2016 — 11:53 AM
maryblackhill says:
Yes – immensely satisfying. This is great.
March 11, 2016 — 1:29 PM
Simon Billinton says:
ahhh very nice. Great setup and payoff at the end.
March 12, 2016 — 5:03 AM
Nicole Broussard says:
Wow! Good writing. I like it.
March 12, 2016 — 7:18 PM
tygertygre says:
Nice one! Very good twist and great escalation from possibly overreacting to murderous. The innuendo from the beginning really throws you for a loop.
March 12, 2016 — 10:20 PM
thedebc says:
“A woman scorned…” Great!
March 13, 2016 — 6:24 PM
Pavowski says:
Oh, well done.
March 14, 2016 — 9:13 AM
Rebecca Foster says:
It’s A Team Effort, Every Day
The commotion was tremendous. Raucous cackling and squawking filled the quiet neighborhood on a sunny Sunday morning. The rest of the team, all aflutter, joined in, creating an incredible cacophony of sound that disturbed breakfasts and Sunday Facebook postings throughout the land. After what seemed like an eternity (but was really just several minutes), the noise gradually subsided. The first egg of the day had arrived.
March 11, 2016 — 11:10 AM
denmaniacs4 says:
Diner
Gage finished his liver and onions, swirled, then swallowed, the puddle of coffee cooling in his cup, left a sawbuck, stepped outside, and considered which way to go as night crashed in.
“You stiffed me, asshole?” said the Stopover Diner cook, reeking of fried onions and hard luck, his meaty hand clawing Gage’s left shoulder.
Gage twisted away from the uninvited hook, said “What’s your beef?” as the cook, flashing a fiver in his fist, spewed, “You left a fin, friend, for a $9.95 full meal deal.”
Gage nodded, drew out another fin.
“Keep the change. You’ve earned it.”
March 11, 2016 — 11:28 AM
thedebc says:
Love the ending!
March 13, 2016 — 6:37 PM
denmaniacs4 says:
Many thanks.
March 13, 2016 — 9:32 PM
Ellen M. Gregg says:
Ushered politely into the room, she lay fully-clothed upon the table, as instructed, involuntarily closing her eyes when the first drop was placed on her forehead.
Hands anointed with the second and third drops moved over her face, and an immediate floating sensation greeted her, a bright light following close on its vertigo-like heels. She catapulted into an ethereal spacescape of nuanced color, blissfully void of all trace of her human physicality and its suffering.
A gentle hand on her shoulder called her back into her relaxed and pain-free body.
“Your aromatherapy session is complete.”
March 11, 2016 — 11:38 AM
thedebc says:
Sign me up 🙂
March 13, 2016 — 6:39 PM
Pol Sedierta (@polsedierta) says:
Falling (100 words not counting the title)
They pushed him through the window.
Going to that room had been a mistake. But he needed that intel. Now he was falling from a forty floor. Lucky for his employers, he’d got the faces and DNA signatures of all the mobsters in the room before diving.
He saw heads showing, even a hand flipping him the bird. He took his cell phone to send the information to the headquarters. Then he blew up the briefcase he left in the room.
Before his head got squashed in the street he saw the flames and the bodies flying from the room.
March 11, 2016 — 11:38 AM
ryanjamesblack says:
You have one wish left,” the Genie said disinterestedly. “So what’ll it be?”
“Hmm,” I tapped a jewel-heavy finger against my brand new chiselled jaw. “I have the riches and I have the looks, now I just need the power.”
“Makes sense,” Genie said. “Wish away.”
“I wish to be powerful!”
“Done,” Genie chuckled.
That was three weeks ago, and you know I never would have imagined it, but I think I’m finally getting used to being jumper cables.
March 11, 2016 — 12:15 PM
disperser says:
I got a charge out of this. Nice.
March 11, 2016 — 12:23 PM
dcxli says:
I got a good chuckle out of that one.
March 11, 2016 — 12:31 PM
Ashleigh says:
Ha! I think he’s at the 5th stage a grief. Good one 🙂
March 11, 2016 — 12:48 PM
maryblackhill says:
Yep – chuckle-worthy – and extra points for correct use of disinterestly. More than five sentences though…
March 11, 2016 — 1:34 PM
thedebc says:
Hahahaha funny
March 13, 2016 — 6:40 PM
kirajessup says:
Gotta be careful what you wish for. Nice story 🙂
March 14, 2016 — 8:57 PM
Mel says:
I wrote three of these things: one that I love, but borders on prompt/snapshot, one that follows the prescribed story layout but I find utterly “meh,” and this one.
She blew a stray strand of hair out of her eyes, already straining to see how many drops fell from the flask’s curved lip.
“You’ve got to get this transmogrification right, else you’re gonna flunk out of the Gifted Witches program,” she chided herself aloud.
Shit– how many drops was that?!
A guy rose from the resulting blast of smoke, blue eyes and black hair settled against bronze skin, his body sleek and tight.
“Well THAT was unexpected.”
Juicy bits. Haha. I’ll probably end up posting the other one I wrote to the blog (MelodyKlink.com) and expanding on it some more. That middle story will probably never leave the notes on my phone.
March 11, 2016 — 12:52 PM
maryblackhill says:
Ah Program. These are obviously American witches, not English ones!
March 11, 2016 — 1:43 PM
thedebc says:
Love it! 🙂
March 13, 2016 — 6:42 PM
Mel says:
Thanks! I tend to write in a more serious tone normally, so I tried something different for this one and last week’s challenge. Cheers!
March 14, 2016 — 7:33 PM
Ridley Kemp says:
Not only did I laugh, but bonus points for using a Calvin & Hobbes word.
March 15, 2016 — 4:45 PM
Julie O'Hora says:
Empty Nest (a Tragedy in 50 Words)
She lies on the bed, braced for the obligatory bi-monthly marital relations.
He joins her immediately — no need to lock the door anymore with both kids at college. She gives and receives a chaste kiss, a fond smile.
Closing her eyes, she thinks about George Clooney. So does he.
March 11, 2016 — 1:08 PM
Nicole Broussard says:
HA! Nice One.
March 16, 2016 — 11:34 AM
glenavailable says:
The silver fox strikes again!
March 16, 2016 — 3:31 PM
hardboiledbaby says:
Very nicely done 🙂
March 20, 2016 — 3:22 AM
greenscreen says:
A little boy is born to a mother that doesn’t want him, and a father that doesn’t know he was born.
He grows to a young man, long and tall and an army of one: him against everyone else.
A young girl sees this, sees something else too, and decides she wants to take a chance on the boy.
She invades, and he battles valiantly- shoring up his defences here and there, but finally ..he surrenders.
Now they’re an army of two…but the war has changed, no less heated- but with infinitely higher stakes.
March 11, 2016 — 1:25 PM
maryblackhill says:
I like this one Mel. I want to know more about this gifted witches programme.
March 11, 2016 — 1:39 PM
Mel says:
Thank you! Something lighthearted from me for once.
March 14, 2016 — 7:34 PM
persimmonromance says:
John took a long drag from his cigarette, filling his lungs with smoke and blowing it out again in a long arc, stirring the air. The ashtray was between them, full of dead butts and gray powder, and Seb pushed it a little closer to John. “Not good for you,” Seb said, shaking his head a little as if there were no half-empty pack next to his own half-filled glass.
John laughed, “You’re no good for me.”
Seb reached across the table, touched that hand, not flinching at the hot ash dropping onto his skin, across the heavy gold band on his ring finger, and said, “No, I’m not.”
March 11, 2016 — 1:46 PM
imagenn793 says:
Love this story, great detail 🙂
March 11, 2016 — 5:37 PM
persimmonromance says:
Thanks!
March 16, 2016 — 3:55 PM
Elizabeth Mallory says:
I love this one! The twist at the end was perfect.
March 11, 2016 — 8:56 PM
persimmonromance says:
Thanks!
March 14, 2016 — 7:04 PM
thedebc says:
Very nicely composed. Great job, open to lots of conclusions 🙂
March 13, 2016 — 6:50 PM
persimmonromance says:
Thank you.
March 14, 2016 — 7:05 PM
Andrew F. Butters says:
Seven years ago we lost him. Recently, Facebook introduced a memories feature that recaps your day from years past. I’ve been wondering what those memories would look like from the day he died and how I would deal with them. Turning memories off altogether, or for a specific day, is an option but that day is also my birthday. I will leave the feature on and try to create more good memories so I will be reminded of how much I am loved as I scroll … scroll … scroll towards the bottom and remember how much he is missed.
March 11, 2016 — 2:04 PM
thedebc says:
Very real, very sad, well done
March 13, 2016 — 7:24 PM
reactionpoetry says:
Weekday Scheduling
I’m a baby sitter until she can’t breathe.
On Thursday I play knock-down-the-blocks, teach her sister’s name, and suction her airway.
Friday is a good day until it isn’t. Ambulance guys don’t question my urgency when they see her numbers.
When there’s no call Sunday night, I know to be at work Monday morning.
March 11, 2016 — 3:04 PM
Hilbert's Concierge says:
So, let’s try this. Ahem…
The cleaver fell; skin, muscle and bone offered a rather meager resistance. With a final tack the blade stuck in the chopping board. Lauren cleaned her hands on the apron, then wiped the sweat from her forehead. She stared at the leg on her working bench, a good piece, it would go for a hell of a price. She turned around and looked at the next tube, the version of herself thin and stringy, the expression empty like the hundreds before and the hundreds that would follow.
March 11, 2016 — 3:41 PM
Russell says:
They drifted through the forest like phantoms, mist obscuring their legs. Hiding behind a twisted elm I betrayed myself with a sneeze. Their ashen faces snapped towards me, huge bloodied lips drawn back in a feral smile.They chased me, laughing and shouting words I didn’t understand until I tripped and sprawled on the forest floor. The largest of the troupe, in a colorful patchwork suit, presented me with two tickets to Circus Romania.
March 11, 2016 — 3:44 PM
thedebc says:
Great imagery. I’m not sure if I should giggle or panic.
March 13, 2016 — 6:45 PM
Paz Spera says:
A cigarette fell from the sky.
Probably discarded by someone on one of the many balconies above.
Five, ten, twenty falling cigarettes and it could still be a strange coincidence.
But when the count got to thousands it was surely not.
It rained ash.
March 11, 2016 — 3:49 PM
thedebc says:
Oooh creepy
March 13, 2016 — 6:52 PM
John says:
Wow, the word count was tough. I started with 300 and kept paring it down. I think it was really strongest around 150 or so. I also decided to try second person which is something I don’t usually like and have never done before, but I’m trying to push myself a little. (interesting to me to note that change ‘you’ to ‘she’ in two places and it goes back to first person…) Hope it’s not too corny.
We rode the ferry at dawn, drove onto the beach after sixteen hours in the car. I fished in the surf, you collected shells.
We grilled flounder over a fire of driftwood in the evening, made love in the dusk, slept on the beach. In the morning we walked, ankle deep in surf alive with tiny creatures, suffered sunburns, drank too much, quarreled like two exhausted kids.
This year, I flew, slept in air-conditioning. The rules: “no driving on the beach”, license needed to fish, no fires… We have seven kids now, I have two and you have five.
March 11, 2016 — 4:29 PM
glenavailable says:
SEEING IS NOT BELIEVING (100 words)
“I see changes overnight,” shrieked 12 year old Emily at the top of her voice to any family member within hearing distance as she stared into her full-length bedroom mirror.
“You mean they’re bigger?” inquired her Mother with genuine interest, suddenly appearing at the doorway.
“Uuum no, actually they’re smaller”, replied Emily, making no attempt to hide her disappointment.
Emily’s mother made the decision then and there.
That would be the last time they visited the harebrained optometrist who’d recommended wearing $600 prescription glasses as a way to make her daughter’s tiny, underdeveloped eyes (known as ‘Iris Dwarfism’) appear larger,
March 11, 2016 — 4:40 PM
thedebc says:
Lol
March 13, 2016 — 6:57 PM
Tsara Shelton says:
Giggle!
March 15, 2016 — 9:46 AM
thisdamnkid says:
Hey, first time doing one of these things, have mercy!
https://itsthesedamnkids.wordpress.com/2016/03/11/it-was-my-fault/
March 11, 2016 — 4:49 PM