Last week’s challenge, I asked you to come up with an opening line for a story.
This week, you’re going to write a story based on one of those opening lines.
(Er, not your own, thanks.)
Look through them:
Choose one.
(Choose one that complies with the original mandate of keeping to 15 words or less.)
A lot of great options in there. (Though, to be fair, a surprising lot of not so great options in this batch. Lots of errors and over-the-limits. People: read your entries before you click SUBMIT. It’ll take you like, 30 extra seconds, I promise.)
Please identify in the comments below which opening line you’ll choose.
I’ll tally and, presuming there’s a winner, I’ll send that person The Kick-Ass Writer.
Then: you write 1000 words using your chosen line. Post at your online space and link back here.
I’ll choose one of the participants (by random) and toss you a copy of — well, I dunno what. I’ll grab something off my shelves and mail it to you. (Or, if you’re international, I’ll give you something digital.)
Due by noon EST on November 22nd.
Get your fingers tapping.
Rebecca Douglass says:
I’m using jebdarsh’s line, “Now, I’m not exactly saying the cat was plotting to kill me. But.”
Drafted the story this morning.
November 15, 2013 — 12:10 PM
Rebecca Douglass says:
And I’ve put it up on my blog here:
The Cat Did It http://www.ninjalibrarian.com/2013/11/flash-fiction-friday-cat-did-it.html
November 21, 2013 — 8:13 PM
McKenzie says:
Emily Measor’s – “The first time I prayed I received an email in return; I gather that’s unusual.” Will do my best to whip this one off by next Friday…we’ll see…in case I don’t manage it, thanks for a kick-ass and thought provoking first line, Emily!
November 15, 2013 — 12:19 PM
Jess McClary says:
Jack’s – It wasn’t the worst idea I’d ever had, despite ending up dead.
I’ll give this a shot, should be fun.
November 15, 2013 — 12:30 PM
shirinp says:
Ken Crump: I’ve been posing as human for so long, you’d think I’d know how to kiss.
November 15, 2013 — 1:00 PM
Ken Crump says:
I’d love to read your story. Where can I find it?
November 29, 2013 — 11:45 AM
Rebecca Douglass says:
Funny, both Emily’s and Jack’s lines were on my short list,
November 15, 2013 — 1:24 PM
Jon Jefferson says:
“mikepaul
Someone once told me bourbon was great for removing blood stains.”
I chose this one. Will have the story up for Reading on Monday.
November 15, 2013 — 1:39 PM
Jon Jefferson says:
Here it is. This is the story I made from the opening line. I call it “Rough Secrets.”
http://jonjeffersonauthor.wordpress.com/2013/11/18/and-the-count-rises/
November 18, 2013 — 11:32 AM
Kyra Dune says:
I chose: I flicked the lighter open and watched the flame dance in the wind.
November 15, 2013 — 1:42 PM
catyorkc says:
Def still using DeeBee’s “Ok, so how many of you can’t count to 15?”
No idea what comes next, but I’m looking forward to it.
November 15, 2013 — 1:47 PM
taureyscribe says:
Yep me too. Get’s my vote, and my rumblings of a story.
November 16, 2013 — 6:52 PM
Lee says:
“Events unfold a little differently each time. Despite this, I can never save them all.” – M. R. Dorough
November 15, 2013 — 1:53 PM
Mark Gardner says:
I like *“It doesn’t mean death,” I told her.* by murgatroid98. Link to follow.
November 15, 2013 — 2:06 PM
Mark Gardner says:
I’m a little bit over 1000 words, but since when do I let arbitrary things like “rules” get in the way of writing? *I’m looking at you, Chuck* I present “Strawberry Roulette:”
http://article94.blogspot.com/2013/11/strawberry-roulette.html
November 15, 2013 — 3:09 PM
Hana Frank says:
Jude’s life was just a series of opportunities and bad decisions – Awkwardtreed
November 15, 2013 — 2:46 PM
thatcalamity says:
Will be using MikePaul’s “Someone once told me bourbon was great for removing blood stains.” for this one. Link will follow!
November 15, 2013 — 3:08 PM
mattyweaves says:
I’m going with, “As her eyeball rolled across the floor, she lit the last cigarette from the pack.” From Kate.
November 15, 2013 — 3:16 PM
JR Simmang says:
Jeb snagged me with: “Jimmy Bryant wasn’t fat.”
November 15, 2013 — 3:25 PM
Jeremy Podolski says:
I’m gonna run with “I won’t tell you how I died, and they can’t tell you why.” from Miss Allison Rose.
November 15, 2013 — 3:45 PM
Beverly says:
I’m new here and a little nervous. I picked CCalhoun’s: The Autumn mist obscured the chasm, and muffled the screams of the creatures trapped within.
November 15, 2013 — 3:54 PM
joeturner87 says:
Just for the irony, it has to be:
OK, so how many of you can’t count to 15? – by DeeBee
November 15, 2013 — 4:36 PM
Gnash Chick (@Gnashchick) says:
Pablo’s, “Could you turn that off?! I hate the fucking Smiths.”
November 15, 2013 — 5:19 PM
Gnash Chick (@Gnashchick) says:
The result: “Pit Stop” http://wp.me/p43pnS-2S
November 19, 2013 — 6:53 PM
mckkenzie says:
Great story, loved it!
November 19, 2013 — 9:01 PM
Gnash Chick (@Gnashchick) says:
Thank you!
November 20, 2013 — 9:11 AM
Jeremy Podolski says:
Unexpected reveals throughout – I liked it.
November 20, 2013 — 9:11 AM
JL Henry says:
I’m going to take a crack at this and maybe even post it this time.
Using:
“Jade wore black.” From S. W. Sondheimer
November 15, 2013 — 5:54 PM
thepixieslayer says:
I’ll be using rexpullman’s ” “Oh Fuck…stick it in already!” She screamed.”
November 15, 2013 — 6:22 PM
thepixieslayer says:
http://thepixieslayer.wordpress.com/2013/11/21/the-race/
November 21, 2013 — 11:24 AM
Tony Taylor says:
I am going with Marybelr’s “Annoyed she stabbed him and finished her dinner”.
November 15, 2013 — 7:16 PM
M.R. Dorough says:
*diner
… just saying.
November 15, 2013 — 8:23 PM
Rio says:
A diner is a restaurant, not a meal. You can’t finish a diner.
November 15, 2013 — 10:22 PM
M.R. Dorough says:
The original said “diner.” Now that he’s taken on that opening line, I suppose he’ll have to figure out how to finish a diner.
November 15, 2013 — 10:41 PM
Doreen Queen says:
It’s a better line if it’s “diner!”
November 15, 2013 — 11:12 PM
Tony Taylor says:
I was assuming that the “diner” was a mistake and that the intention was “dinner”. Am I wrong in that assumption? I will ask the author. Yes…you really can’t finish a “diner” unless there is some mason-aspect I wasn’t aware of.
November 16, 2013 — 7:09 AM
Tony Taylor says:
I’m going to continue with the “dinner” aspect as opposed to “diner”. I have asked the author and since I am half way through the first draft, I ‘m going to assume it’s “dinner”. However, you know what they say about assuming…
November 16, 2013 — 7:18 AM
Doreen Queen says:
You can if you think the “diner” is a person who was eating and the “she” is a zombie!
November 16, 2013 — 10:22 AM
Tony Taylor says:
That is fantastic!!!!! Love it
November 16, 2013 — 10:31 AM
kb says:
Love it!
November 17, 2013 — 4:45 AM
Tony Taylor says:
http://taylormaderandomwrites.blogspot.com/2013/11/dinner-with-blind-hate-flash-fiction.html
November 21, 2013 — 11:02 PM
Mozette says:
Stevie Jennings approaches her baby blue Chevy Cavalier, and says to me, “This is Ivan. He’s undergoing a mid-life crisis at the moment. So be gentle, ‘K?”. – Autumn Marie
I like this one…
November 15, 2013 — 8:06 PM
Doreen Queen says:
Stupid question alert here – where’s the link to the lines? (and how did I miss the original limitation of 15 words???? – yes, I’m one of THOSE ONES!)
November 15, 2013 — 9:51 PM
Jemima Pett says:
Yes, Chuck made his own mistake with the link. You can hit the ‘blog’ button at the top of the page, get a list of the last posts, scroll down and hit ‘older posts’ and get to the Nov 8th post.
November 17, 2013 — 8:39 AM
Doreen Queen says:
Thanks so much for the info about the link – and good luck with your story (and keeping it g-rated)!!!
November 17, 2013 — 9:42 AM
Gina Hay says:
I’m using ‘Someone once told me bourbon was great for removing blood stains.‘ don’t remember who’s it was, though.
November 15, 2013 — 10:44 PM
Gina Hay says:
http://gekkegina.simplesite.com/298906585 , i call it: simple villains
November 19, 2013 — 8:19 AM
Gina Hay says:
last minute mind change: instead, i’m going for – “The car came at full speed, with no choice I stood in front of it.”
November 15, 2013 — 11:26 PM
Gina Hay says:
sorry, no mind change. I’m terrible at making decisions.
November 19, 2013 — 8:20 AM
Smoph says:
I’m going to take on Bree’s: It was a strange feeling to wake up dead.
November 16, 2013 — 1:12 AM
Smoph says:
It is done! Here’s “On the inside”: http://prose.smoph.org/2013/11/20/on-the-inside/
November 21, 2013 — 2:58 AM
feralbulb says:
It’ll be Aspeed’s: Only after the world exploded did Daniel figure out it was his fault.
November 16, 2013 — 4:18 AM
feralbulb says:
Here ’tis now:
http://feralbulb.wordpress.com/blurb/
November 19, 2013 — 8:53 AM
aspeed says:
Thanks for choosing it. Cool story!
November 19, 2013 — 9:20 PM
feralbulb says:
You’re welcome. Glad you liked it!
November 20, 2013 — 2:17 PM
dana says:
Stupid question alert2: yeah, where’s the link to the lines? I’m new, didn’t contribute a first line, but would like to give this a whirl. That ok?
November 16, 2013 — 5:25 AM
taureyscribe says:
Hi Dana, go to Chuck’s blog Nov 8 to choose from the multitude 🙂
November 16, 2013 — 8:27 AM
awkwardtreed says:
Rolling with Jeb’s “Jimmy Bryant wasn’t fat.”
Second greatest opening line about weight behind Fight Club’s “Bob had bitch tits.”
November 16, 2013 — 6:07 AM
terribleminds says:
It’s only THIS MORNING that I’m noticing that, oh, hey, an earlier draft of this posted. Sooooo, yeah, whoops. Post is still good, mostly, though the title was wonky, and the link was gone. It looked good when I proofed it before posting, but should’ve looked *after* posting.
This, in a post where I chastise folks for the editing of their entries.
Irony is alive and well, kids.
DON’T DO SCHOOL EAT DRUGS STAY IN MILK
— c.
November 16, 2013 — 7:39 AM
Mozette says:
I picked the most ordinary-looking one… and made it into something … well not ordinary. 😀
http://youcantgoback-andotherimpossibilities.blogspot.com.au/2013/11/ivans-mid-life-crisis.html
Please let me know what you think of it… and of course, enjoy!
November 16, 2013 — 8:12 AM
Smoph says:
I liked the completeness of it, that you didn’t need to go any further with it. We know there’ll be trouble. Interesting road you took that line on. 🙂
November 22, 2013 — 9:51 PM
Heather Milne Johnson says:
I’m using mikepaul’s entry: Someone once told me bourbon was great for removing blood stains.
November 16, 2013 — 8:23 AM
Bill says:
Hmmmm,.. Just a FYI:
According to the prompt”s rules, choosing a disqualified opening line (over 15 words) automatically disqualifies the story.
“This week, you’re going to write a story based on one of those opening lines.
(Er, not your own, thanks.)
Look through them:
Choose one.
(Choose one that complies with the original mandate of keeping to 15 words or less.)”
November 16, 2013 — 8:25 AM
Mildred Achoch says:
I will use “It’d been awhile since I’d killed someone with kindness, or any other weapon.” by flyawaybluebird. And I will separate “awhile” into its constituent elements, making the sentence 14 not 13 words. 🙂
November 16, 2013 — 12:01 PM
Kyra Dune says:
Here’s mine, starting with: I flicked the lighter open and watched the flame dance in the wind.
http://theshadowportal.blogspot.com/2013/11/flash-fiction-challenge.html
November 16, 2013 — 9:44 PM
andreaspeed says:
I picked Rebecca Douglass’s “Harold! Harold! Hurry, the eyes are back and they’re in the pantry!” Here’s Eyes Without A Face – http://andreaspeed.com/2013/flash-fic-eyes-without-a-face/
November 16, 2013 — 10:49 PM
Rebecca Douglass says:
Loved the story! And greatly appreciate being chosen 🙂
November 19, 2013 — 1:04 AM
Jeremy Podolski says:
Nice payoff with the last line. Still chuckling.
November 20, 2013 — 8:52 AM
Rebecca Douglass says:
Yes.
November 21, 2013 — 8:19 PM
Smoph says:
That is a great little twist on the line.
November 22, 2013 — 10:00 PM
R.T. Wilder says:
I’m going with Andrew Jack’s “Every second Saturday, Tom Pope had a beer with Devil.”
November 17, 2013 — 1:03 AM
dangerdean says:
I chose RickAlan’s “Jared exhaled a plume of pot smoke, just as he stepped on the creature’s entrails.” http://dangerdean.wordpress.com/2013/11/16/flash-fiction-find-your-favourite-opening-line/
Got that done, now I’m going to bed.
November 17, 2013 — 3:11 AM
nitromidget says:
Pretty enjoyable and very detailed. Felt like I understood the MC’s mindset, and loved the add-in about the selfie. Made me chuckle.
November 18, 2013 — 6:04 PM
Dawn says:
Too many great lines to choose from…
November 17, 2013 — 8:02 AM
Jemima Pett says:
I’m going with Caroline Arbelay’s “The bloody Arc de Triomphe is up the arse end of the Champs-Élysée again.” but adapting it for a G-rated blog (I know, I know!) It’ll be on my blog early on Nov22.
I was sorely tempted by garypo705’s “Bang” and Krud’s Shetland ponies… maybe another time 🙂
November 17, 2013 — 8:44 AM
Nico Serene says:
I could not resist angel011’s “The ficus is plotting to kill me.” (dun-dun-duuuun)
http://nicoserene.com/2013/11/17/fear-the-ficus/
November 17, 2013 — 11:35 AM
Kyra Dune says:
I like it. Funny, and yet kind of scary.
November 17, 2013 — 1:30 PM
Nico Serene says:
Thank you! Glad you liked it!
November 19, 2013 — 8:51 AM
Ilona the Rose says:
Hilariously terrifying. Hillarrifying.
I especially loved the explanation for the animated inanimates – I will now proceed to read more of your work.
November 18, 2013 — 3:15 AM
Nico Serene says:
Hillarrifying – I must remember this! My favorite kind of story to write. Thanks for reading and hope you enjoy the others!
November 19, 2013 — 8:52 AM
nitromidget says:
Really amusing. It sent my thoughts scampering down a lot of different fun paths, like the notion of bringing women over being out of the question. Just what would come to life if a woman stayed the night? With this poor guy’s luck, it’d be a Trojan mid-unwrapping. I definitely wanted to hear more stories about other things that had previously come to life. Had the sofa chair ever gone all Pee Wee’s playhouse? Has the lamp followed him around the house, desperate to find out what’s so good about reading? And is there anything he could do to fix his condition? Fun one!
November 18, 2013 — 4:21 PM
Nico Serene says:
Thanks! I had so much fun writing this one and good thing (or not?) that there was a word limit or this could have really have blown up in my face. Though your questions are tempting… 🙂
November 19, 2013 — 9:13 AM
Joyce Juzwik says:
I chose Brennan’s line ‘The sun shone down as it always had, and for a moment, everything was perfect.’ It was a great opener for my Forget Heaven. Please enjoy.
http://jfjuzwik.blogspot.com/2013/11/terrible-minds-flash-fiction-challenge.html
November 17, 2013 — 4:41 PM
Brennan says:
Nicely written! I especially like the way you work in the internal dialogue.
November 17, 2013 — 9:10 PM
Joyce Juzwik says:
Thanks much. So glad you enjoyed it. Your line really set the tone for what followed. It was a lot of fun.
November 20, 2013 — 10:52 PM
crow365 says:
I’ll be using Julia H’s line: “I flicked the lighter open and watched the flame dance in the wind.”
Story forthcoming.
November 17, 2013 — 6:28 PM
crow365 says:
And here it is, “Backwash”: http://nickegelhoff.com/2013/11/19/flash-fiction-challenge-find-your-favorite-opening-line/
November 19, 2013 — 10:24 AM
jllfhenry says:
Using SW Sondheimer’s “Jade wore black”
Enjoy!
http://jodilhenry.blogspot.com/2013/11/flash-fiction-challenge-entry.html
November 17, 2013 — 8:58 PM
Kyra Dune says:
That was awesome.
November 18, 2013 — 8:05 AM
mckkenzie says:
Used Emily Measor’s “The first time I prayed, I received an email in return; I gather that’s unusual.” Here it is…hope y’all like it!
http://mckkenzie.wordpress.com/
November 17, 2013 — 11:55 PM
Kyra Dune says:
That was cool, I liked it.
November 18, 2013 — 8:11 AM
mckkenzie says:
Thanks…so glad you liked it!
November 19, 2013 — 7:12 PM
Jeremy Podolski says:
Subcontracting – clever. Nice job.
November 20, 2013 — 9:23 AM
mckkenzie says:
Thanks!
November 20, 2013 — 9:55 AM
Smoph says:
Interesting idea mckkenzie.
November 23, 2013 — 12:45 AM
Emily Measor says:
Great job, McKenzie! Honoured that you chose my line 🙂
E
November 23, 2013 — 8:55 AM
mckkenzie says:
Thanks, everybody! I’m usually far too shy to share my fiction, so it’s great getting feedback!
November 23, 2013 — 12:42 PM
Andre G. says:
Using: “My story should have ended on the day I died. Instead, it began there.” The opening line in “The Lady Who Plucked Red Flowers beneath the Queen’s Window” by Rachel Swirsky.
November 18, 2013 — 2:00 AM
Andre G. says:
(And then there’s that awkward moment where you realize you somehow overlooked the part of the prompt where it’s connected to last week’s challenge of coming up with the damn lines yourself! *Insert Homer Simpson’s ‘DOH!!!’ here* >.< FORGIVE ME! — I didn't add a opening line last week but I would like to participate? Don't clobber me with your laptops, please!
Just in case it's useful I can provide an opening line here and choose one!
My (late) opening line: I covered my mouth and nose while digging deeper into the trunk.
I've chosen cats: "A small noise escapes my face, something between a snort and a laugh."
November 18, 2013 — 3:40 AM
nitromidget says:
I chose Gareth Wiscombe:
Read on if you must, but the risk is all yours.
November 18, 2013 — 1:02 PM
nitromidget says:
http://nitromidget.wordpress.com/2013/11/18/terrible-minds-challenge-read-on-if-you-must-but-the-risk-is-all-yours/
So, thar she blows.
November 18, 2013 — 3:26 PM
dangerdean says:
That was a fun read.
November 18, 2013 — 5:08 PM
nitromidget says:
Thanks! I’ve been MIA for a bit, so this was a perfect way to jump back in. Glad you enjoyed it!
November 18, 2013 — 5:39 PM
M.R. Dorough says:
Loved it, especially the invocation interspersed throughout the piece.
November 19, 2013 — 3:42 PM
nitromidget says:
Thanks, Hah, I wasn’t sure if it was really noticeable, or would seem like randomly italicized words. Success 🙂
November 20, 2013 — 10:39 AM
M.R. Dorough says:
It was really subtle. I only noticed because the italicized words seemed random (no reason to inflect the words), so I started to pay more attention to them.
November 20, 2013 — 10:43 AM
nitromidget says:
That was the idea. I wanted it to sound like a demon gloating, but in reality he’s tricking the reader into reading the words that set him free. Sounds like that came through, so I’m duper happy about that. 😀 Thanks for reading it!
November 20, 2013 — 10:54 AM